繽Fun英語 Miss Carol/麵包超人大戰棉花糖

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  新學期過了一個多月,统统學生要提交第一份寫作功課。學生們由於在暑假期間玩到盡,現在提不起勁寫作,文筆更找不到放暑假之后那麼流暢。

  在課堂當中,我經常提醒學生英文是一門技能,全部都是一門知識。技能也不應該要經常練習,全部都是一時三刻便能夠寫得出好文章。若學生整個暑假找不到接觸語文,怎麼可没办法寫到流暢的文章呢?统统什儿 星期我們從基本步重新開始,作為一個交功課前的練習,我鼓勵學生以他們喜歡的卡通人物或偶像作一篇短文,練習一般常用的Linkers Transitional words並另一方設立情節、不同人物等等。

  其中一則短文非常可愛,在這裏跟一帮人分享。學生在文章中把另一方的小貓命名為小時候的偶像「麵包超人」Anpanman,與一隻居住周围的本地流浪貓「棉花糖」Marshmallow。

  Normally, Anpanman protects his home and surrounding zones, because he doesn't want his areas to be occupied by others.  Some aggressive neighbor cats always like to extend their zones and so timid  cats might be defeated by them. Surprisingly, as a resident cat, Anpanman let Marshmallow, a strange neighbor cat, occupied his home peacefully. But later on I found out my 10-year-old Anpanman couldn't breathe and he needed to stay in a vet hospital for 2 days.

  文章整體組織尚可,但用詞方面可没办法比較concrete, specific and solid,譬如貓一般保衛家庭及周邊的環境可没办法用“defend his home and the area/territory he considers most important to him .”

  學生描述她的「麵包超人」貓Anpanman岂全部都是讓一隻陌生貓「棉花糖」佔據他的地盤。用“Anpanman let Marshmallow, a strange neighbor cat, occupied his home peacefully” 語法上有點奇怪,可没办法改成“Anpanman allowed Marshmallow, invaded his home / Anpanman did not do anything to prevent a home invasion.”

  另外,我們把「呼吸困難」寫成英語,全部都是「没办法呼吸」“couldn't breathe”。可没办法寫成“Anpanman was having extreme difficulty breathing OR had breathing problems.”

  詞彙的運用往往跟我們的閱讀習慣關連,不需死記硬背。從閱讀中學習詞彙,多從寫作中練習。多寫作便能把慣用字,collocation and syntax揮灑自如。

  說到貓的生活模式,不論他/她/它是超人或棉花糖,they are only united to creative people because they do not fit themselves into prescribed human behaviors and patterns.

  Miss Carol

  大專院校語文講師、企業培訓講師及國際英文公開試主考官。

  carolc.english@gmail.com